darkness fades: equinox (villanelle)

saturn at equinox

when darkness fades, and dawn lights up your eyes,
deep in the morning silence we make love –
melt in the dream of a day as night dies.

i come to life in your love, and realize
you’re the sun-cusped girl i’ve always dreamed of
when darkness fades, and dawn lights up your eyes.

you turn me on each waking hour, sunrise
to sunrise, all radiating love –
melt in the dream of a day as night dies,

as earth tilts, night and day merge, and we rise
at the equinox – emotion’s axes move
when darkness fades, and dawn lights up your eyes.

spectral in the shadows, dark matter flies
while we explore each arc of our subsolar love –
melt in the dream of a day as night dies.

we find ourselves – feverish fantasies,
bodies in ethereal motion, orbiting love
when darkness fades, and dawn lights up your eyes –
melt in the dream of a day as night dies.

                                                                         freddie

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Comments

  1. This is very lovely and works on all levels, despite you having suspected of the Villanelle:

    the form’s constraints give a spurious
    sonority to phrasings which would sound
    sentimental and affected when expressed
    without the evocative rhythmic repetitions

    Ha! Not so.

    Now, what about a Sestina…

  2. claude de bigny says:

    splendide!

    a villanelle for modern man!

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